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 <i>Tired.</i>

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 <i>Tired.</i>

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 "Wow... this is a pretty sight. Hey, how'd you know about this place?"
-"Oh, well I used to come here when I was little. My mother told me this used to be where a tribe of Sandslash used to live at. But they died out after being preyed upon by Flygon and such... what a shame." Opal turned to face one of the glimmering walls. "Okay, stand back! I'm gonna start working now!"
+"Oh, well I used to come here when I was little. My mother told me this used to be where a tribe of Sandslash lived. But they died out after being preyed upon by Flygon and such... what a shame." Opal turned to face one of the glimmering walls. "Okay, stand back! I'm gonna start working now!"
 Opal's tail blade began to glow purple and as she made slashes to the wall with such deft movements, Mike couldn't even see where she even cut. "Okay, this is gonna be a bit loud!!"

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 The trek through Sandsong Desert was largely uneventful for Mike's first time in such an environment. He imagined being able to see Pokemon similar to Ruben in the desert attack the three of them, but not a soul appeared before them.
-He definitely took notice at Syrup and Opal's state as they traversed through the sands. Syrup was definitely handling it without any complaint, so she must've had previous experience in the desert. As for Opal... she was the same as Syrup: Calm, collected, and cooperative. Was Opal also accustomed to the desert's blazing heat?
+He definitely took notice at Syrup and Opal's state as they traversed through the sands. Syrup was definitely handling it without any complaint, so she must've had previous experience in the desert. As for Opal... she was the same as Syrup: calm, collected, and cooperative. Was Opal also accustomed to the desert's blazing heat?
 Mike had absolutely no problem with this heat, in fact, he could do fine in more extreme temperatures than this, but he was aware that not everyone was like him and required more water than he would in such climates.

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 "Yeah! How about you tell me who you are, 'cuz I haven't seen yer face before!"
-"O-oh! I'm sure you don't want to hear, but... My name's Opal, and I recently moved here." Opal bowed her head at Syrup, and upon doing so, finally noticed Mike whose height was below the 's. "Oh my! Sorry, I didn't see you there, mister...?"counter
+"O-oh! I'm sure you don't want to hear, but... My name's Opal, and I recently moved here." Opal bowed her head at Syrup, and upon doing so, finally noticed Mike whose height was below the counter's. "Oh my! Sorry, I didn't see you there, mister...?"
 "This here's my son, Mike, and my name's Syrup. Well, now that we got introductions outta the way, how's about you tell me yer plight? Somethin' wrong?"

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 "Aw, consarn it! Ya know ya haven't really let me down! Yer still my son, an' that's all I want from ya! 'Course, I'd love to see you become a big an' handsome dragon... Hey, speakin' of dragons, whatever happened to Sir Bet dragon? Last you said before I got angry with ya was that he was freezin' up everything in Tao Village." Syrup was more than eager to hear news when it comes to dragons.
-"Oh that... well, Sorbet really did a number on Tao Village since he was out of his mind and we had to stop him... Last I heard from Maple, he's gone now..." Mike sighed as recalled all the hardships from that night which seemed to last almost a forever.
+"Oh that... well, Sorbet really did a number on Tao Village since he was out of his mind and we had to stop him... Last I heard from Maple, he's gone now..." Mike sighed as he recalled all the hardships from that night which seemed to last almost a forever.
 "...Oh, well, here I was gettin' all hot an' bothered thinkin' about Sir Bet and now I'm just hear this? Eh... Well you get yerself all dried up an' ready fer bed. Momma here needs a bit of alone time for now..." Syrup sighed wistfully as she tapped Mike to go away and she sank herself into the bathtub to <i>relax</i> by herself. <i>"Oh well, I didn't get to see much of Sir Bet, but maybe that Gunpauda fella oughta get me somewhere..."</i>

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 "Huh... Okay! I'll look after Maple, but there's not much to worry, I mean Fresnel sure seems like a strong guy to protect her as well!" Mike felt like that was a half-lie since he really didn't know Fresnel for <i>that</i> long, but he seemed to protect her especially well during Sorbet's crazed attack.
-"Yeah, atta boy!" That's what I wanna hear. Aah~ You've got magic claws, Mikey-boy! Ya made me feel good this whole time!" Syrup untensed herself even further and relaxed at the tub. "Just keep on scrubbin' me down... maybe fit in a massage or two..."
+"Yeah, atta boy! That's what I wanna hear. Aah~ You've got magic claws, Mikey-boy! Ya made me feel good this whole time!" Syrup untensed herself even further and relaxed at the tub. "Just keep on scrubbin' me down... maybe fit in a massage or two..."
 And Mike did just as his mother lazily commanded, which resulted in a few minutes of silent thinking as he did the hygienic duty for her. Although, after thinking it over, he had to ask his mother. "Uh, sure... hey, mom, what was that picture out on the front room? Was that... you?"

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 After their arrival, they wasted no time in beginning their routine training. Clawing the rocky walls was one exercise that aided in practicing various cutting techniques they possessed, such as Mike's Metal Claw and Dragon Claw, or Syrup's Night Slash. While they cut away, Mike felt that he had to tell his mother everything that happened at Tao Village, for fear that he might have not been entirely truthful or mistaken many details during their drunken state last night. Syrup mostly kept a straight face during Mike's explanations, but she clearly disliked what her son had been through. Being caught by Merlot and wearing a maid dress... whoever this 'Merlot' was, Syrup felt that Mike was greatly exaggerating her size and Mike could've done much better than being caught and forced to wear a shameful dress...
-Then there were moments that Syrup couldn't keep a straight face any longer. The words 'Maple had a few moments of trouble' coupled with 'no, I wasn't really there with her' just put anger in Syrup's expression as she began to pound away at the rock with increased vigor. <i>Kheh..!! I raised the two of 'em to be brother an' sis, but he oughta have been with her then!! At lleast Maple's still doin' alright and it prolly gave her some experience under her gut but tarnation!</i> Syrup decided she was going to at least have Mike repay for his lack of brotherly obligations, at least, in her own way. "Mikey-boy... let's try somethin' else... like practicin' yer observational skills..."
+Then there were moments that Syrup couldn't keep a straight face any longer. The words 'Maple had a few moments of trouble' coupled with 'no, I wasn't really there with her' just put anger in Syrup's expression as she began to pound away at the rock with increased vigor. <i>Kheh..!! I raised the two of 'em to be brother an' sis, but he oughta have been with her then!! At least Maple's still doin' alright and it prolly gave her some experience under her gut but tarnation!</i> Syrup decided she was going to at least have Mike repay for his lack of brotherly obligations, at least, in her own way. "Mikey-boy... let's try somethin' else... like practicin' yer observational skills..."
 "Huh?" Mike couldn't really pay attention to what Syrup said as he was busy cutting into the rocky wall. Mike stopped to turn around but he could not find any trace of his mother anywhere. "Mom...? Where are you?" Mike kept looking, but locating his mother was of no avail, and that was when a chill ran down his spine. <i>"Oh... crap, when mom does this is when she's about to...</i>